Spirited from the Guff...new Rondeau. Have I met all the criteria?

Okay, although not nearly as good as my other because of rhyming restrictions, I have written a new Rondeau that I think is true to form.





Spirited from the Guff





Spirited from the Guff, two precious lives.


On winged angels, from heaven derived.


Twice, for me, did joyous herald bells ring


one babe in winter and one babe in spring.


Their luminous souls, my spirit revived.





My winter surprise did swiftly arrive.


the other so slow, spring was contrived.


For each little soul, sweet sparrows did sing


spirited from the Guff.





Our lives, they were dull, and somewhat deprived


before our children brought joy to our lives.


Now, my sated heart, does gleefully cling


to infinite love these cherubs did bring.


Because of our love, their souls will survive.


spirited from the Guff.

Spirited from the Guff...new Rondeau. Have I met all the criteria?
Well, Spit, first off, I read this as Spirited from the Gulf - which threw me completely as for the next few lines I thought it was something to do with the army!! How stupid can one be - mind you I have never heard of the Guf and would have had to look it up.


I bet you're thinking....why doesn't she get on to the critique?


Well, I am going to give you 9/10 - as I am a very hard women. Every line was a perfect iambic pentameter apart from 'the other so slow, spring was contrived' which had 9 syllables not 10 - now change 'slow' to 'tardy' which means 'late' And Bingo 10/10


As this is a modern rondeau I will allow a not perfect rhyme sound lives/derived/survive + spring rhyme sound


Well done. They are very hard aren't they.....which is why I've only written one Rondeau in my life! You see, I am a sham, not the expert everyone thinks I am.
Reply:Googling "guff" I arrived at the site for a rock band from Atlanta Georgia. I should not be so confused as to think you spirited away your two precious ones from them am I? Perhaps you were just playing their music for inspiration? Whatever nonsense, you not only did the rondeau well you gave a glowing tribute to your children. P.S. If they don't know their blessed by having a Mom like you, tell them the neonman said so which is not guff!
Reply:A perfect rondeau about a perfectly wondrous topic, your children. I also love my children this much, so this poem touched me deeply. I love the line " for each little soul, sweet sparrows did sing". Lovely poem. Thank you.
Reply:This is a beautiful rondeau. And about children - God's gifts. How lovely you described the blessing. I can relate to: 'Twice, for me, did joyous herald bells ring'. This poem is truth.
Reply:Brilliant. Your children can't possibly realize their good fortune in having a mother like you, so loving, talented and versatile. Once more, I'm in awe of your accomplishments.
Reply:Beautiful. This one should be framed and mounted. TD
Reply:I'd say so !! It's beautiful,%26amp; Yes you Have!!
Reply:I love your style. you speak from the heart to the hearts of many! God Bless You!