Monday, May 17, 2010

The perfect day?

winter is over spring has begun, flower are bloowing the sun


the sweet smell of flowers are filling the air, the land and trees are no long bear


the suns shining brihty high in sky, but i feel my tears as i start cry.


for in my heart it's a winters day, it's been so cold since you went away


i wish our love had never begun, i wish you never took away my son


for the pain i feel just wont go away, even on this the perfect day

The perfect day?
Nice. The switch in the themes and the contrast was nice. It conveyed your emotion very nicely.





I would suggest you check your spelling.
Reply:Reminds me of a song my mother in law would sing everytime one of her sons gf's left them and they were so sad. "Why do the birds keep on singing, why does the sun keep on shining". I hate break-ups but life continues around us no matter what.
Reply:Man ur poem is so deep. But in short i m also a poet and this is not a poem worth a listen. Try 2 write poems simpler and with a single rhyme in whole poem.


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